I think I did well and The thing I think I could do better is get the noise out of it.
This is a maths Dlo that I did. It was about Place Value. Sorry if you can't hear me because of the noise.
Tuesday, 14 October 2014
On Monday and Tuesday I did writing. We had to write about our holidays. I was writing about the waves pools and I think I did well and I think next time I could use more describing words. I hope you like my writing.
“Wippee”! As I slid down the hydra slide. The waves turned on, I nearly drowned! I averred in a bus and I was sitting next to my best friend harmony. I was really excited when we got there because I knew I was going to have a fun time. In the hydra slide I could hear harmony shouting “HELLO WAVE POOLS”! The people in line laughed. When I slid down it was my second in the hydra slide it was the light one and I whispered “It’s really cool in here”! When I jumped in the pool again I knew all the boys were checking me out in my green, yellow and white bikini. I Was booming in the deep with my other friends Eden, Te aria and Still Harmony. We had lots of fun. When I got Out I had some money that my mum gave me and I spent it on ice blocks. We had to go so I went in the bus and we I did that we were allowed to make a hut in there. The End.